I enjoyed being away from school, Miss Watson, and the Widow. There was no need for the proper clothing and proper talk around Pap in the cabin. But even then, I missed Tom Sawyer a whole lot and Pap warn’t always the best to be around. He would always knock me around and come home drunk, and yellin. I could never go no where when he was gone, he’d lock up the cabin’n keep me in. I eventually got to sawing a way out, but without telling Pap I was doing so. He somehow found out about the hole I was making and he wouldn’t have it. He went on saying: 
“You ungrateful boy, try’n leave here and goin back to your life of frills!”
He picked up an old whiskey bottle to hit me over with and I soon began to runaround and avoid a hit.
“You think you’re better’n your father, now, don’t you…”(Twain 30).
I was gettin more angry and said back to him:
“I know i’m better than a no good drunk!”
Pap came at me a whole lot quicker, but with his knife this time. I got pushed to a corner with not a way out. But just then, my hand felt the edge of the saw. I grabbed it and hit Pap on top of his head as hard I could. He fell right back and a-mumbled a bit as he was stumbling up again. I gave him a good hit one more time and he warn’t movin after. I got to panicking so much I realized none of it was real. I sat up quickly from my bed in a sweat. I could hear the Widow and Miss Watson havin a talk in the other room. Guess it was a dream all along. Just another quiet night alone in St. Petersburg, Missouri.
This was so interesting to read! The dialect of Pap, and Huck, both portrayed the characters so well. I liked how you changed the story a bit with Huck hitting Pap and then Huck waking up from a dream, it really tied the end together well.
ReplyDeleteWhile you did miss a few places to inject dialect (e.g. the second sentence), it stays true to Huck's speech. It's a really interesting twist to what might have happened with Pap if he and Huck fought. The dream ending actually makes sense, because Huck is scared his father will show up and thinks about it from time to time.
ReplyDeleteWriting in a different dialect definitely isn't a strength of mine but a fair challenge. I'm curious, how would you have changed the second sentence?
DeleteI loved reading this! It was very creative to put this into Huck's dream because it ties to the whole thought that Huck was afraid of his father. I think that there were a few issues in dialect but overall it was really creative.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading this. I liked how you chose to expand on a scene from the beginning of the book and your inclusion of providing unexpected twists. One thought I had was what if it did not turn out to be a dream? If Pap had caught Huck's escape hole, how do you think the story would be different? Do you think Huck would have still been successful at running away?
ReplyDeleteThank you! And if it didn't turn out to be a dream, I would imagine the town would look much harder, considering they would be looking for a murderer, rather than a body in the water. Although, Huck can be quite cunning so there's always a chance he could get away.
DeleteYour story was very thoughtful and creative. I liked how your part of the story could be true if Huck's dad found the hole. Also the characters of Huck and Pap are very realistic to how they act in the actual story which keeps the integrity of the novel.
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